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Hope, burning, blew
like driftwood across white beaches
as sunrise breached
the distant horizon line.
Life driftwood on white beaches,
sand sullied calm dreams.
The distant horizon line,
turbulent, wailed a mourning.
Sand sullied calm dreams
like a burden we couldn't shake.
Turbulent, wailing a mourning,
we loosed wishes to the sea.
Like a burden we couldn't shake,
sunrise breached as
we loosed wishes to the sea:
hope burning blue.
like driftwood across white beaches
as sunrise breached
the distant horizon line.
Life driftwood on white beaches,
sand sullied calm dreams.
The distant horizon line,
turbulent, wailed a mourning.
Sand sullied calm dreams
like a burden we couldn't shake.
Turbulent, wailing a mourning,
we loosed wishes to the sea.
Like a burden we couldn't shake,
sunrise breached as
we loosed wishes to the sea:
hope burning blue.
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A pantoum for the beautiful, inspiring goddess I call Mel ( hopeburnsblue )
I wanted to play around with my word choice between the first and last stanzas, hence why the first line differs so much (blew with a w, versus blue the color; also, punctuation). I also cheated JUST A SMIDGE on the second line in the last stanza (moved "as" from first word to last) to make it flow more naturally.
Mel--you are a sweetheart. I appreciate your friendship and everything you've done for me lately--more than you could know. Thank you, thank you, thank you.
November 2015
I wanted to play around with my word choice between the first and last stanzas, hence why the first line differs so much (blew with a w, versus blue the color; also, punctuation). I also cheated JUST A SMIDGE on the second line in the last stanza (moved "as" from first word to last) to make it flow more naturally.
Mel--you are a sweetheart. I appreciate your friendship and everything you've done for me lately--more than you could know. Thank you, thank you, thank you.
November 2015
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Beautiful! I like how you mixed the form up just a little. What a nice tribute 