literature

I will Be Like Asphalt

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Literature Text

starting today, 
the wasps will float and fly
to tighter nests,
to less-scarred skins--
a soliloquy of heartache
I refuse to revisit

I will be like asphalt

pliant and forgiving
to those who warm me;
cold and unyielding
to those who set out
to break me down
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ThePeculiarMissE's avatar
Excellently written -- a very powerful piece, indeed! :heart:

I just have one piece of constructive criticism: the first letter of the word "starting" should be capitalized because it is the poem's opening word.  While it's not vital to the writing's overall impact, little things like that can nonetheless be distracting to grammar nit-pickers such as myself. Wink