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Purple clouds
draped over crescent hips--
bashful twin moons.
:iconglory-be-project: Day asdfghjkl don't even ask me lol.

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July 18th, 2013
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Lady-Yume Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013   Writer
You've been featured here: lady-yume.deviantart.com/journ… :heart:
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:iconbetwixtthepages:
betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Hi, 

your fantastic work is "surprise of the week" with the :iconmulthaiku: group here fav.me/d6ewohb

have a great day :)
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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart: Thank you!
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:iconcality:
cality Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The last line is so very lovely, and reminds me of 1Q84 by Haruki Murakami. :heart:
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:iconbetwixtthepages:
betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much!

I don't know that one--I'll have to look it up. 
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cality Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! <3
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the imagery of purple clouds! Though now that I've read the other comments...:lol:
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:iconbetwixtthepages:
betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle: Thank you so much!
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :)
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*fangirling*
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:iconbetwixtthepages:
betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle: :eager:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconcannotevenplz:
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:iconbetwixtthepages:
betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Bahahahaha--that's a new one for me! 
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I absolutely love it. :iconlovesplz:
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I hope you don't mind but your haiku has been featured here >> kuriakyuuketsuki.deviantart.co...

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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much!
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ieatrosepetals Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :heart:
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deinktvis Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Student Writer
not sure about the sci-fi, but i like it!
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:iconbetwixtthepages:
betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart: Thank you!
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deinktvis Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Student Writer
:nod:
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maxnort Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013   Writer
touch me cold handed
held warm in these crescent hills
springtime melts the snow

--
yes, very forward of me
but this is still just poetry
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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very pretty! :heart:
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Footnoting Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013
Although I, myself, prefer the strict syllable count 5/7/5, I applaud this Haiku---one of the finest I have seen in a long time.
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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! :heart:
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad someone else thought of nudity, I wasn't going to comment first saying that I thought of naked people. :XD:
Lovely poem, very gorgeous! :heart:
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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle: Thank you!
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dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
this reminds me of half naked people. :D
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:iconbetwixtthepages:
betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle: I can see that haha.
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dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
:D I just have that naughty brain. Ignore me and enjoy your weekend, lol.
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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
NONONO, haha, that made me chuckle--because really, that image was what spawned this to begin with. ^.^
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dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013
OHHHH!!! I see. :eyes:  good to know, good to know. 
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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think of sunset with this haiku, really. It's quite a interesting piece and I adore the imagery in this one. :)


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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, dear!  I'm glad you interpreted it differently--that's the whole point of poetry, after all! :heart:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure! :)

And yes, I definitely agree. :nod:

I know when I first read it I was really trying to wrap my head around it, but I think the moons really solidified my own interpretation of this piece. 'Cause when the sun sets, obviously this is when the moon is becoming visible and normally clouds have all sorts of hues to them and one of the colors is purple. :nod: Overall, I love it when poetry makes me think. 

But enough of my rambling; this piece is simply lovely. :heart:
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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconheartglompplz:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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SourAir Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is a very nice poem; great work~! :)
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betwixtthepages Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, darlin'! :heart:
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SourAir Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem! :happybounce:
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