literature

Your Fading Freckles

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I'm gliding across your red-head freckles
and grazing the oceans of your eyes with my fingers,
dreaming of you
in a duality of opalescent tear-streaks
and translucent laughter.

I've been trapping myself in your arms
for so long,
I can't recall
what living outside of your phantom ever meant.

And you're no longer mine to hold on to,
but my heart is stuck on you.

I'm spending my days
keeping track of my memories,
but they've already forgotten me.

You've already forgotten me.

And if I had any choice,
I'd let you fade into silence by yourself
instead of screwing my eyes shut with your face in my mind
and turning out all the lights.
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It's an utterly speachless piece, of beauty and love and wishes. To be a cliche, I'll say that you've written my own thoughts in your words, to utter perfection. The feelings are without words, that you have given words to them.

"I've been trapping myself in your arms
for so long,
I can't recall
what living outside of your phantom ever meant."

It's a beautiful set of lines that just leak emotion. The words are meshed between the lines and jump out at the reader, while tugging ever so slighty at the heartstrings. The beginning lined drag you under and hold you there, devoid of any thought besides what the words mean. The middle presses the thoughts and emotions unto your own, and the ending leaves you suspended in the emotion and longing.